east renegade vs Elementality [3-0 KO]

2 Bars
ASAP
(if not done within 30 minutes from check in. Whoever posts 1st wins)

Check & G'Luck

check, gdluck

Piece-a Italian phony, loser in denial, I’m so far ahead, he can’t see me for miles
You’re dropping ONE BY ONE no homies left; this nigga has Dominoes on Speed Dial

(Piece-a italian phony = Dominoes //pizza)

Niggaz whack digging dee-rack, lookin like Big Black on Joey Crack all twirled n whirled
Pics of joy-riding 'Cam-L's back' all fat and curled is when this dudes ON TOP OF THE WORLD

(Dee-Rack = D Rack as in D cups for a bra)
(Cam-L's Back, Like Came L's = Camel Back)

i dont need to rape his ass to hear this kid yell in shame over his stretched mentality
i just need to tape n blast to leave a "Big L" in his name harder then catchin reality//

reality hits hard
his pic has big l and there is a L in his name

so i'm frying his brain like "fresh meat" with my lines so cannibals can eat
prying his veins from his flesh defeated rhymes faster then animals in heat//

iight nice lines man. Lets get some votes.

Cats & short b/down`:

Opener: east Ren... that ass bit I'm not a fan of... but made relevance in the 1st line... punch was nice in the second.
Flow: east Ren... had smoother transition between lines and bars. Work on that, Element`.
Complexity: Element`... I needed the expos... and he had relevence in his plays, but did lose out on potency.
Creativity: E... in terms of mets, I was feelin' Element`s more. Not as mean as East's... but better conveyed.
Set ups: East Ren... E.. your 3rd line was really weak filler... try to work on this... you'll hit harder, and for more your verse's duration is potent.
Punches: East Ren.
Consistency: East Ren. nice form... good experience, apparently. You should hit up the tourney. Think abut it, at teast.
Wordplay: uhhh... I'ma say this one tied. Both could connect they plays better... imo.
Multies: Element`... I know east Ren had tighter ones - but E went for longer multies, and gets the vote here. Even though his were not filled out multies, he reached for complexity.
Vocab: east Ren... edged it over Element`enough to take the win in this.
Closer: east Ren... not the fire for a finisher, but the plays were better formulated... set up wasn't great... but last line was decent. Element`... I wasn't feelin' your closing line... personally... prolly could have been formulated a little dif~ for my vote on this.

MVGT = east renegade

thanks for the vote and break down man

0 - 1 East.

Thanks, good detailed vote.

Elementality

bar1:Iight Punch Felt multis coulda been more sound or in tact
bar2:again Bars decent but The structure of the rhyme scheme is a bit wild you know what i mean? but still i liked the multis.


East Renegade

bar1:Good bar personal punch but i thought you coulda hit the shit out of him if you worded it right lol still good bar

Bar2:Deceeent, the punch wasent really all amusing but the concept was cool.


cats:

Opener:ER
flow:ER
Struc:Tie
Complexity:Ele
Creativity:Ele
Mutlis:ER
Punch:Ele
personals:ER
Vocab:ER
Closer:ER

Vote: East renegade

nice quick battle here

thanks for vote and feedback, 2-0, uppin for more votes

uppin for votes

kk.. imma put a vote in.. bin waitin for people to hit this qwik for votes.. but i guess theres not as much people round as i thot.. so here i am..

flow- Ren
punches- tie
multies- Ren
similies- neither
werdplay- El
nameplay- neither
structure- Ren
complexity- El
creativity- El
personals- neither
opener/closer- tie
vocab- tie
delivery- Ren

Ren GMV.. simply.. real close.. Ren edged it..
.. El you needa try not to put so much content in each line.. kills yer whole bar homie.

thanks for the vote man

uppin to close this battle

Aiight... *closed*

Battle Stats updated.