5 bar battle verse...

* this was my verse on another site... I got KO'd [for some reason]
but I'm just looking for additional feed on this. *

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Aiight, look...

Ain't much to ya' style buh' panties, bra-straps and PomPoms
Only way you's Rappin' is... fittin' Famz wit' ConDomz...

Fuck, man! Ya' rhymes ain't even worth this Rap, SeriOus!
buh' you callin' me'uh "shit talker" yur last query! Plus!

How you expect to be da' victor, callin' me Fag?
the way you rap rhymes, have me think you gotta' Bald Bag!

Shit, Dude! Your skill can't be more than A Week or Two old!
I could father your shit as though I gave ya' momz' LOADS!

So, give it'uh Rest... ya' writs is Pests... I'ma Squash This...
only time you Mind Set'uh threat... be Huntin' Cocks, Bitch!
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lol@bald bag nice shit

meh.. majourity of the verse was filler.. imo.. only punch you threw was yer first bar and even at that it was played as fuck.. you definitly need to take a second out n think about yer shit... one of the easiest ways to diss an opponent is using there name.. umm werdplay is a big thing.. def need to bring that into the mix, n try to diss yer opponent, n stay away from generic shit lik bald bag.. lol., even tho its worth a chuckle, its not really gunna score any points with the voters.. but keep at it..

You know thats my type of quality ,,,, Nice

Keep in mind [and... my bad if I didn't mention this... but] this
is an old battle piece from like 4 months ago... so I don't
disagree with ya' feed, Kris... but I did see honesty there.
I appreciate that.

One ['1]

well yah know.. im all about honesty .. not gunna brown nose yah for no reason.. but if its an old verse.. im sure yer shits came miles from this verse..